Analyze the rhetorical situation of your Freshman Portfolio. For those few students who do not have one only: analyze the rhetorical situation of your Freshman English research paper/project.
I have not created a portfolio and neither have I taken any English class during my freshman year. Instead for this week’s analysis, I would like to review my freshmen year’s research essay from my International Relations class. Here is the link to the paper for reference: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1xBqNXi8K4cS74NFGk7GNwmBw0Dh0l9nB2j4ls22VDOQ/edit?usp=sharing
My paper did not contain any names or dates in the beginning which was not required but would have been preferred. The paper was on how according to Professor Riofrancos, the green energy technologies that are promising for our environment can cause harm to the climate and environment in the Global South and what steps should the climate policy makers take to solve this problem. The paper did not require a conclusion and it was 2.5 pages long and required extensive quotations and evidence from the writings of Professor Riofrancos. My essay started with an introduction that introduces the topic from a broader lens in the first few sentences. Then I included my thesis statement that summarizes all of the key points and solutions I presented throughout my paper. It was a solid introduction due to it’s inverted pyramid structure of writing.
The second paragraph explains how renewable energies are harming the Global South. This paragraph is very effective because it contains factual information provided by Riofrancos such as Chile being responsible for 30% of the renewable mining and how this is making freshwater inaccessible to 18 indigenous Atacameno communities and habitats of species like Andean flamingos. I have successfully connected the terms used in Riofrancos’ writings to my own using quotations and brackets for change in tense. Despite using many quotations and direct evidence from the Riofrancos, my writing was well-organized.
In the last paragraph, I mentioned the proposed solutions by Riofrancos and summarized each of them in a sentence at the end that clearly states what policymakers should strive to do. Throughout the writing, I used technical language from Riofrancos’ writings and explained them in brief which appealed to both field-related and general audiences and further added to my credibility. I also used proper citations throughout the writing for the reference of the audience. Overall, my paper included some grammatical mistakes but it directly showed the connection between problems and solutions presented by Riofrancos related to renewable energy extraction.
